Overtaking people was fun until I found out that people were overlapping me but it did not matter I would be behind them where ever they go.
crashing into something wondering what it was I keept my head low I saw something go down I sped up so would no get the blame.
speeding past people like there was no tomorrow I keept my speed up im ready to win I said lifting my arm up ready to pounce my arm got over I swum into second place the rest of the people got up good game I said yep they all said well down people the teacher said ultimate swimmer me is in the house
Cody
ReplyDeleteThis is a fantastic post that ties in really well with having the great photograph that goes with it. I think that your paragraphing is excellent and I really enjoyed reading about this event. I thought that you maybe could have had a think about your punctuation, and have a look at the capital letters and full stops in the last two paragraphs but I can see why Mr Spice was so proud of this post.
Mr Webb